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Escape these chains
Beaten, bruised, and bloody
Can't somebody help?
For ~poetrybook's contest. Round 3, "bondage"

It's probably scary how close to the deadline I keep doing these. But I'm making it so it's all good. Hopefully I continue onto the next round though.

And yes, this is such a creative title.
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This is a very interesting haiku, and it is very unusual. It conjures up strange and disturbing images, which, if that is what you wanted to do, then good job. The only comment I have on this poem is that, yes, I understand that as a haiku, it is supposed to be this short, but I truly think this poem could be better longer. That way, you get more space to put images in our heads, make us feel emotions. This just feels too brief to make us feel anything or think for a long time after we finish reading. Overall though, very good poem.
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Some of the best and most famous works are in just a few words. This is clearly one of these works. 10 words that drive depressed ones through. 10 words that we all feel and won't all admot. 10 words that many cry about every day. 10 words that are lost, and YOU just said. I almost cried!!!!! :cries: AMAZING! If I knew how to make this go onto the deviantart wall for daily deviations, I would!!!! (I only critique works that I like 'cuz I don;t like being mean or if there is a little mistake. This is a perfect one!) You deserve zillions of fans from just this!!!! :D :D :| bye
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mdc01957 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
Apart from the title, this looks so nicely done. And in few words to boot. :)
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inkstaineddove Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :) The title was kind of a fail, but it was the only thingI could come up with unfortunately.
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mdc01957 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
Still, it's not bad. ^^
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inkstaineddove Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you (:
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mdc01957 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
Sure thing! :D
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