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To my dear, sweet unborn child
I'm sorry for the world you've been brought into.

I'm sorry it's not perfect
and no one trusts easily.

I'm sorry we've screwed everything up.
Blame your ancestors for the past, me for the present, and you for the future.

To my small, unknowing unborn child.

I'm sorry you might not be accepted.
Brush them off with laughs and smiles.

I'm sorry that society is dumb.
That if you're different you're shunned.

It was the same for us.

To my naive and foolish unborn child.

Make mistakes.
Be stupid in your twenties.

Experiment.

Be comfortable with who you truly are.

To my silent and still unborn child.

Curse at the skies.

Curse the government.

Live without bounds.

But don't do anything you'll regret.

              Society will hang it over your head.
Something I'd want to say to my child best written. Personally I think there's (with some things) more power in literature than spoken words.
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I absolutely love this, and I agree- society is so stupid nowadays. I love...just they way that you put your words, they way they're sequenced, how they flow. Their meaning is so deep, and how you executed your vision was excellent and beautiful.

I really like how you repeat "unborn child" with two adjectives. I think the way you did that really adds to the poem.

Recently, I've thought about society today, and i want to say that this is the best way anyone could ever put this. And I'm not just saying that. I really do love it!

Amazing!
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012   Writer
Without a shadow of doubt one of the most if not one of the best poems I've read on this site in a long time which has a meaningful message to convey. I'd easily read this to my own kids, if I have any that is. Sound advice in such eloquently written lines.
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FearlessLullaby Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful.
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TheAwesomeMeerkat Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student Writer
This is exactly what I would say to my child.
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ARH1997 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's a good poem, thought it was gonna be about a miscarriage, but none the less a good poem, great display of pity and anger.

I mainly cam here because of a particular interest in miscarriages. It's not a nice story.
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dismiss874 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
Yes.
That is all.
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AerithGainsboro96 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
This is so true....I think we all need to say this to our children
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